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Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay any tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Many
people
 perceive
tax
 as
financial
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 burden which can reduce their disposable
income
. I,
however
, consider taxation a necessary evil, because without
tax
 revenue it is difficult
ofr
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for
 a country to function effectively. The government can invest
tax
 money in the development of public services and facilities which are indispensable to the daily lives of citizens.
Firstly
, the operation of a country is governed by different departments which are
normall
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normally
normal
 staffed by civil servants.
Tax
 money is collected to pay for the
labor
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labour
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 of these
people
, whose work can address the needs of citizens,
such
 as fire brigades and police forces, which
preven
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prevent
prevents
 the public from fire accidents and crimes.
Furthermore
,
people
 could experience tremendous inconvenience if a city did not have public facilities
such
 as bus
station
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, schools, and medical services. These
facitilities
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facilities
activities
 could not be made available without
the
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government funding, most of which is from
tax
 receipts. Private sectors sometimes invest in educational services and healthcare, but normally charge a higher price which is out of reach of the general public. Individual contributions to the running costs of the communities
not
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 only appropriate but
also
 essential because taxation is
also
 a powerful tool to achieve the goal of
income
 redistribution, which is the key to social stability. Many countries impose
progressive
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a progressive
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tax
, meaning that the higher
income
 a taxpayer earns, the more
tax
 he or she should pay. The
tax
 levied from high-
income
 earners can be used to provide a safety net for needy
people
,
such
 as benefits for the jobless, financial support for those with disabilities and allowance for low-
income
familes
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families
.
People
 in
low-
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the low-income
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income
 bracket are normally subject to a low
tax
 rate so they can
ratain
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retain
 a large proportion of
income
 in their pockets to cover basic needs.
This
 can close the gap between the haves and have-nots and reduce the possibility of social unrest arising from economic disparity. Overall, it is reasonable and necessary for
government
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the government
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 to charge
tax
, which is essential to the running of a country as well as its stability.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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