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Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay any tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Many
people
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 perceive
tax
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 as a financial burden that can reduce their disposable
income
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. I,
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, consider taxation a necessary evil, because without
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 revenue it is difficult for a country to function effectively. The government can invest
tax
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 money in the development of public services and facilities which are indispensable to the daily lives of citizens.
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, the operation of a country is governed by different departments which are normally staffed by civil servants.
Tax
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 money is collected to pay for the labour of these
people
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, whose work can address the needs of citizens,
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 as fire brigades and police forces, which prevent the public from fire accidents and crimes.
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,
people
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 could experience tremendous inconvenience if a city did not have public facilities
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 as bus stations, schools, and medical services. These facilities could not be made available without government funding, most of which is from
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 receipts. Private sectors sometimes invest in educational services and healthcare, but normally charge a higher price which is out of reach of the general public. Individual contributions to the running costs of the communities are not only appropriate but essential because taxation is
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 a powerful tool to achieve the goal of
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 redistribution, which is the key to social stability. Many countries impose a progressive
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, meaning that the higher
income
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 a taxpayer earns, the more
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 he or she should pay. The
tax
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 levied from high-
income
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 earners can be used to provide a safety net for needy
people
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 as benefits for the jobless, financial support for those with disabilities and allowance for low-
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 families.
People
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 in the low-
income
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 bracket are normally subject to a low
tax
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 rate so they can retain a large proportion of
income
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 in their pockets to cover basic needs.
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 can close the gap between the haves and have-nots and reduce the possibility of social unrest arising from economic disparity. Overall, it is reasonable and necessary for the government to charge
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, which is essential to the running of a country as well as its stability.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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