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Task 2: Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A big consideration of many
parents
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 about their
children
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's education
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 started since theirs were able to walk. Is it
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necessity
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 for
parents
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 to bring their
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 to
school
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 when they are
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five years old? Or there are no apparent differences from giving their
children
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 education at their seven. These questions are still rusk in some
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'
mind
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. Some believe that to start their
children
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 learning since they are very young as it may help them fast learn and socialise while the
children
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 that start their formal
school
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 learning at elementary degree may gain more family
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 and close. In my experience, the
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 best choice depends on how much
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 they have to take care of their
children
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. On one hand,
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 who don't have much have to stay with their
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 all day are more likely to bring their
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 to
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school
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 very early age in order to help them learn things fast and have friends. Teachers will teach them languages,
basic
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basics
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 of life, and how to socialise which the
parents
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 may not know how to teach them correctly.
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, when I was at
kidergarden
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kindergarten
, I learnt how to read and write alphabets.
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, it is much easier for
parents
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 to bring their
children
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school
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 than teach them things by themselves.
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,
parents
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 who want their
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begin
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 their
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 learning at seven years old because they require to share
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 with their
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 and teach them how to live by themselves. They believe that the most important period to give a child the sense of warm and close family is when they are young.
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, the
children
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 can feel how much love their
parents
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 give to them as they teach them how to live.
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,
children
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 that start
their
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school
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 later may have
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 closer relationship with their
family
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families
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. All in all, some families send their
children
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 to
school
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 at
very
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 early age since they believe teachers and friends will fasten them to learn and socialise whereas some families want to spend their
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 and teach them
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the basic
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basic
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 of life for
better
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relationship
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relationships
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.
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, each family has different conditions in giving their
children
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's education, so to choose the best suitable one
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 your
children
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 is the best choice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • social development
  • structured learning environments
  • essential skills
  • reading, writing, and arithmetic
  • social norms
  • undue stress and pressure
  • natural curiosity and creativity
  • unstructured play
  • emotional and psychological development
  • mature
  • rigors of formal education
  • natural developmental timeline
  • life skills
  • decision-making
  • problem-solving
  • informal learning
  • structured educational system
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