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Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their work from home instead of working at offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good workers and employers. Do you agree or disagree.

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These days the technology was developed, people use social media for jobs and education.
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 19th ,century many companies prefer their employees to work on
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 as it is more convenient. In my point of view,
computers
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 and modems can reduce
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 for office workers.
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 essay will discuss the drawback and the benefit of using electronic devices for labour.
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 with, nowadays, humans increases the use of electronic devices
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 was evolved. In
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 19th ,century many firms try to increase their electronic devices' capabilities,
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, home workers can succeed in their
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 in a limited time range.
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 when they have dinner with family or have to go to other places.
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, in many countries
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 are used for works due to their convenience and fast.
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, there were many individuals who have to take care of their children and cannot work at the office,
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, home working should be encouraged.
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, there were some persons who believe that
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 can only do at the office.
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, these groups of individuals think that
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 are easy for information to get lost.
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computers
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 can be hacked or broken.
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, they do not prefer electronic gadgets with their
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. In conclusion, these days persons prefer work on
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 more than paper because of their benefit, while, some humans believe that it is lack of quality in a
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 as using convenience gadgets
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 of applying paper. In my view, home workers need to be encouraged more as it is more comfortable.
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