Students should pay total cost of own university studies , rather than having free education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
In many
nation's
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nations'
education
sector
, both Change to a plural noun
sectors
universities
and government tends
to provide better Change the verb form
tend
education
to the
juveniles. In which local authority provides the Correct article usage
apply
facillty
of Correct your spelling
facility
faculty
education
for free where as
Correct your spelling
whereas
universities
charges fees from their students
. It is generally argued that students
should pay the amount of money charged by universities
for their studies
instead
of getting free higher education
provided by the state. I completely disagree with this
given statement. The facts of the thesis will be demonstrate
in the following paragraphs.
There are major reasons behind to Change the verb form
be demonstrated
disagreed
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disagree
that
notion. Obtaining proper Change preposition
with that
education
is the right of every children
but not every student is able to afford the cost charged by private Change to a singular noun
child
universities
. Also
nowadays universities
are prolifeeating
its fees which Correct your spelling
proliferating
becomaes
a major problem for poor people. Correct your spelling
becomes
become
Therefore
, they can easily grab all the small facilities regarding education
in governmemy
Correct your spelling
government
universities
where no any amount of money charged
from Add a missing verb
is charged
students
.
In
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On
Correct article usage
the other
other hand
, free Change the wording
another hand
other hands
education
by government
could be more beneficial for Add an article
the government
students
, as private universities
collects
a large amount from Change the verb form
collect
students
every year to continue their further
studies
, it
can Correct pronoun usage
which
led
to Change the verb form
lead
be led
extra
Correct article usage
an extra
burden
on students
. Also
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,Also
this
extra burden
can impacts
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impact
on
their performance Change preposition
apply
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whereas
where as
there is no Correct your spelling
whereas
any
Correct quantifier usage
apply
burden
will
be faced by pupils in government Correct pronoun usage
that will
universities
. They will do more focus on their studies
and feel free in order to arrange money for free.
To conclude , many students
who
belonged to poor class families or they unable to pay the high cost of their university Correct pronoun usage
apply
studies
. For them , free education
provided by authorities could be beneficail
as well as it is more Correct your spelling
beneficial
helpfull
for them to overcome Correct your spelling
helpful
burden
of the fees.Add an article
the burden
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