Students should pay total cost of own university studies , rather than having free education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

In many
nation's
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education
sector
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, both
universities
and government
tends
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to provide better
education
to
the
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juveniles. In which local authority provides the
facillty
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facility
faculty
of
education
for free
where as
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universities
charges fees from their
students
. It is generally argued that
students
should pay the amount of money charged by
universities
for their
studies
instead
of getting free higher
education
provided by the state. I completely disagree with
this
given statement. The facts of the thesis will
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in the following paragraphs. There are major reasons behind to
disagreed
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that
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notion. Obtaining proper
education
is the right of every
children
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but not every student is able to afford the cost charged by private
universities
.
Also
nowadays
universities
are
prolifeeating
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proliferating
its fees which
becomaes
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becomes
become
a major problem for poor people.
Therefore
, they can easily grab all the small facilities regarding
education
in
governmemy
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government
universities
where no any amount of money
charged
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from
students
.
In
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other hand
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, free
education
by
government
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the government
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could be more beneficial for
students
, as private
universities
collects
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a large amount from
students
every year to continue their
further
studies
,
it
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can
led
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to
extra
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an extra
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burden
on
students
.
Also
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this
extra
burden
can
impacts
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on
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their performance
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there is no
any
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burden
will
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be faced by pupils in government
universities
. They will do more focus on their
studies
and feel free in order to arrange money for free. To conclude , many
students
who
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belonged to poor class families or they unable to pay the high cost of their university
studies
. For them , free
education
provided by authorities could be
beneficail
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beneficial
as well as it is more
helpfull
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helpful
for them to overcome
burden
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the burden
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of the fees.
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