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in some countries, number of people who visit the art gallerias are declining.what are the reasons for that? how can we solve this problem?

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Art
galleries
 are scattered all over the world.
However
, in some nations, the quest to see these exhibits is nose-diving. Many reasons have been given for
this
 reduced desire.
This
 essay will examine some of the causes for
this
 and some plausible ways to rectify it. In recent times, many people are no longer interested in visiting
art
 exhibitions anymore. In my opinion, one of the major reasons is that most of these exhibits are available online.
Art
 enthusiasts can view these works online without having to travel. A good example is the 2020
Art
 exhibitions in Glasgow, Scotland. Most of the items were displayed on the internet because there are restrictions on movement. Another reason for the decline is that
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 most
art
 lovers are senior citizens. The younger generation is mostly interested in tech and finance because they tend to pay their bills
hence
 the little or no interest in artworks.
Nevertheless
, it is not doom and gloom for the
art
 industry. These problems bedevilling the
art
galleries
 in recent times can be mitigated.
Firstly
,
Art
galleries
 should add entertainment to their displays.
Galleries
 shouldn't be drab, exhibitors should be able to have some fun when they are viewing some of the works of their favourite curator.
In addition
 to that, awareness should be made to sensitise people to the importance of
art
 and the amount of hard work
that is
 put into producing a top-notch painting. In conclusion, it's a known fact that the love for visiting the
galleries
 is declining, The government and curators have a lot to do in other to spice up the love for
art
galleries
.
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