In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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the advent of the 21st, century everyone wants to achieve goals in a short Change preposition
With
time
period,following this
practice food
industry has also
taken a step forward towards a faster world. One school of thought reckons that fast food
that comes from another nation replacing the traditional food
that is
served in a different nation, ,,
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however
some individual believes that it will create a high amount of negative impact on families and societies. I completely agree with Add the comma(s)
,however
this
given notion. The facts of the thesis will be elaborated in
the upcoming paragraphs.
Considered broadly, in past Change preposition
on in
time
India was famous for their healthy food
that was fully rich of protein and nutrients but after some decades the natural food
was nearly vanished in the whole nation due to hassle full and time
-consuming process. Moreover
, in the developed cities traditional food
was completely left by the local peoples and they start adopting fast food
that comes through the overseas countries because it was cheap and easy to cook food
, throughout the busy life of the person fast food
play an important role in their life. To illustrate, the citizens of the developed nations do not have time
to prepare the food
at home they prefer to eat outside due to the high availability and cost effectiveness
.
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cost-effectiveness
In addition
, few surveys conducted by the local authorities had found the problems that are occurring due to continuous inhale of junk foodstuff make them obese and also
it may lead to serious health issues in the future. Furthermore
, prepacked food
had also
covered up a high scale of remote areas. Additionally
, only backward areas are left from the fast-meal till now there are few people that still eat traditional food
but unfortunately
it will be Add a comma
,unfortunately
also
covered by junk food
after some time
, whereas this
type of processed food
vanishing the traditional food
of culture and it is a serious problem for a common people, not only some big companies that had planned to cover the remote areas with unhealthy food
but also
some of the market players already started implement of their plans. For an
example, Zomato is a Correct article usage
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food
delivery company that had almost covered the whole of india
by delivering Change the capitalization
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the
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fast
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fast-food
food
at discounted prices as well as they created a habit of regular eating in remote
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the remote
field
so, they can hold the bigger market from the country.
To sum up, traditional Fix the agreement mistake
fields
food
is our culture symbols many Indian cultures represent through their religious food
it is first
and foremost duty of every individual of a
society to conserve our meal. Remove the article
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food
is correct on
its place but it should not have to forcefully hold the whole Change preposition
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