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It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaur, dodo…) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial notion heating a debate over the fact that it is not crucial for people to prevent the
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 of animal
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 as it is a natural process. In my opinion, I consider myself an opponent of
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 statement. Without a shadow of a doubt,there were various
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 on the earth becoming extinct naturally millions of years ago. Due to the drastic drop in temperature, almost all faunas
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 as dinosaurs, dodo could not adapt immediately so they were wiped out.
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, for the time being, the
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 of creatures caused by humans with numerous cruel actions
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 as hunting, using the hair of animals for clothes.
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, rhinos are on the brink of
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 because of the humans’ inexorable appetite for rhinos’ horns since they think that their horns do good to people’s health
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 its nutriment as humans’ nails.
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, it is undeniable that the current
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 of faunas is mainly caused by society.
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, people should take responsibility to prevent the death of creatures that strongly poses a threat to humans’ lives. Undoubtedly, a
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 dying out can lead to the
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 of others because all
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 world are connected by a natural food chain.
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, if the sharks are wiped out, small fish
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 proliferate and thrive because there is no danger so their food will be microorganisms, shrimps which lead to some
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 becoming starve due to lack of food.
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, humans will become the ones who suffer the most because of the problems they cause
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 as starvation, natural disasters, which raise mortality.
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, there is a wealth of reasons that humans should take animals preservation into serious consideration and find tactics to prevent death. In conclusion, it is irrefutable that faunas die out naturally in the past,
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, people are the main factors that lead to the current
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 of creatures so they have to solve
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 problem because it profoundly impacts people’ lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extinction
  • evolution
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • conservation
  • irreversible
  • ecological balance
  • species preservation
  • environmental ethics
  • sustainability
  • endangered species
  • natural selection
  • ecosystem services
  • wildlife protection
  • moral obligation
  • human intervention
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