Computer games are becoming very popular among children of all ages and nationalities. Parents say they are concerned because these games have little educational value and many harmful effects. Do you agree or disagree?

These days more and more adolescents have spent a large amount of
time
on online
games
around the world. While some parents have started to monitor
children
's computer use, busy parents who work until late are inclined to let them free, arguing
children
will learn self-restriction in
time
.
However
, I strongly believe that computer
games
are more harmful than beneficial.
First
of all, young people can be addicted to online
games
and waste their
time
and resources.
Children
around 10 are not enough matured to restrict themselves and they easily play
games
for much longer than they are supposed to do so.
In addition
, if students spent more
time
on
games
, they would spare less
time
on assignments or preparation and it would end up with poor academic performance.
For instance
, some students who indulged in online
games
dropped some classes and
finally
dropped out of primary school.
Secondly
, the
games
on the internet are harmful to the physical and mental health of a child. Long before
children
played outside, while they are sitting for a long
time
during
games
nowadays. The shift in
children
's play would prevent them from physical growth. What is worse, through social
games
a child would be unconsciously involved in a crime. Some vicious crimes can occur to the child where the parent does not know. In conclusion, disadvantages in computer
games
weigh more than the advantages. Students would get low academic grades and might be exposed to serious risks caused by a sedentary lifestyle and hidden crimes.
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