The end of the world's fossil fuel resources and the subsequent changes will be a positive development in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

I completely agree
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the statement that the end of the world’s fossil
fuels
will have a positive impact on society. According to my positive development in society means harmonization in the home which means peace in the world. Which will happen by either putting a ban on usage of the fossil fuel or by its extinction. There is a number of reasons which can substantiate the answer. Usage of fossil
fuels
leaves an environmental footprint which affects the ecosystem
this
happens especially with industries like petrochemical industries
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non-renewable
energy
like coal and petroleum to fuel their boilers and machinery to extract the desired product after which they dispose of the untreated
water
into the
water
stream which affects the quality of the
water
and in ,
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localities are affected by it after consuming it. Despite knowing that
this
is unlawful they don’t want to treat the
water
before releasing it to the ecosystem in order to save the extra cost.
In addition
to
this
extracting fossil
fuels
demands for natural habitats to be eradicated especially forests which is home to many species,
as a result
endangering their lives. Many off-shore reservoirs are built which pollutes the ocean and in
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affects the flora and fauna in it. As a
,
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result there have been many consequences to these actions increasing the average temperature of the world to 3
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Celsius which is the sole reason for to rise of the sea level
thus
reducing the landscape for human habitats. All
this
could be put to rest when we stop using fossil
fuels
. We could rather harness renewable
energy
like solar
energy
, wind
energy
and
water
energy
which is safe, effective and will reduce pollution to a greater extent. There has been a lot of scientific advancement in the areas of renewable
energy
utilization which are cost-effective and safe.
Thus
, we could proudly say that end of the world’s fossil fuel resources will definitely have a positive impact on society.
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