Some people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree
Social networking sites
such
as Instagram and Facebook have a large influence on people
and society
. Some people
think that these sites has
brought a positive impact on individual and Change the verb form
have
society
. But I totally disagree with the claim that it brings positivity in
the lives of Change preposition
to
individual
and Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
society
. Crime
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The crime
rate
and obesity
burden has increased exponentially due to plethora
use of these social websites
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the plethora
One
of the negative effects is exponential
increase in Add an article
an exponential
the exponential
crime
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the crime
rate
particularly in the last
decade. Due to difference
in opinion on Fix the agreement mistake
differences
Whats app
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Whats-app
group
and Facebook, people
threaten other group
members. There has
been many cases reported lately. Change the verb form
have
For example
, one
of the incidents happened in India, where group
admin of a social site app threatened and killed Correct article usage
a group
one
of the group
members. The reason was that he had a different point of view on a topic and that did not go well with the group
administrator. Due to easy access of
these networking websites, Change preposition
to
people
and society
lose patience and become intolerant. As a result
, crime
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the crime
rate
has increased lately.
In addition
to increased
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the increased
crime
rate
, obesity
burden is on the rise due to physical inactivity and irregular eating habits. Because young Correct article usage
the obesity
people
engross themselves into Facebook or Instagram all day with minimal or no physical activity. It has given a gigantic negative repercussion on individual
and Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
society
in term
of health issues. Fix the agreement mistake
terms
Therefore
, obesity
, particularly in teenagers, has increased exponentially in the last
decade. For instance
, as
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a
per
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apply
report
published in Add an article
the report
a report
one
of the leading health generals of Canada states that obesity
in children between age
13 to 19 has Fix the agreement mistake
ages
an
increase Correct article usage
apply
of
20% since 2000.
To conclude, due to Change preposition
by
easy
and free access Correct article usage
the easy
of
Change preposition
to
these social networking site
, Change the determiner
this social networking site
these social networking sites
crime
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the crime
rate
has risen up. In addition
, obesity
has increased due to physical inactivity due to occupying all time
with Add a hyphen
all-time
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smartphones
smart phones
and there is no time for physical Correct your spelling
smartphones
exercises
. The government can help to reduce Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
crime
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the crime
rate
and obesity
by publishing ill effects of being not active and displaying some hoardings on main intersections of cities that explain benefits
of tolerance and patience.Correct article usage
the benefits
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