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Natural resources such as oil, forests, and fresh water are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does this cause? How can we solve these problems?

#resources #oil #forests #water #rate
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In the contemporary era, unrenewable
resources
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 are reached their lowest level. The issue of deficits of
natural
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the natural
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 deposit is widely debated in the world today, with some
people
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 claiming that two major consequences
considered
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 to be. There are several reasons for
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, but
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 a number of measures we can take. One of the causes of the problem is that
a
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war for territory amongst the well-developed
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 and
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 ones might start, meaning that not only
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 quantity will decrease, but
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also
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.
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, China has problems with
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 supply, and
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the
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nearest
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 Mongolia and Kazakhstan
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 danger because of in the case of shortage, China with its huge population can easily take
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power over those
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. Kazakhstan is reach of natural
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,
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 and has all elements from
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the Mendeleev
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 table, which means that for the
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 decade its nation would not see any deficits in
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.
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 another issue is that some
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population
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populations
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 and species would die abnormally, just because of
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a shortage
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 supply of
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the resource
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resource
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resources
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.
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, Zambezia’s population decreased
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 40% in comparison with 5 years ago, due to not enough clean
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 for
people
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, with result that thirty and disease took
people
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’s lives. Regarding potential solutions, probably the immediate step would be
adequate
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an adequate
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use
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 of
resources
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 by governments.
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 could be done through national education of
people
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 on how to economy
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, electricity and not greedily buy food that would not be eaten to cure
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 problem.
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 result in helping the environment on the demand-suppose relations, and England is a great illustration of it, where
people
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closing
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 the
water
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 flow while brushing their teeth to economy
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.
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, another possible remedy
may be
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maybe
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 implementing the
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 of advanced technologies worldwide, especially in the
countries
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 where the ability
of drinking
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to drink
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 clean
water
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 will become normal for
people
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. A station with cleaning
water
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 from Tesla to African suburbs is exempli gratia, which lead that
people
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 and animals
are now become
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now become
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 healthier and happier. In conclusion, the main problems with
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 of natural
resources
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 associated with future war and extinction of living beings can be solved through adequate
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 and modern technologies. There is not only certain bodies should care about
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 matter, but
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Earth planet livers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • non-renewable resources
  • economic instability
  • water shortages
  • agricultural production
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable management
  • conservation
  • alternative energy
  • afforestation
  • reforestation
  • water conservation
  • responsible consumption
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