Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There has been a dispute over cutting down public
recreation
areas
for apartment buildings in the
city
centre
, helping people save commuting
time
for work. Though there are some benefits to commuters, I would not support replacing parks and gardens with the purpose of their
time
convenience. On the one hand, As the
centre
is usually chosen area for most companies for their offices, there is always a high demand for apartment buildings in
this
area. It is the result of people considering their work-life balance or productivity affected by the long commuting
time
between home and work.
For instance
, a man who commutes only fifteen minutes from home to the workplace and vice versa would feel much better in the morning and have more
time
for his family or hobbies.
Furthermore
, in terms of profit, apartment buildings in the central area are easily sold and rented.
However
, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks.
Recreation
areas
in the
city
centre
are the fresh air amid the hustle and bustle: In sustainable urban planning, there should always be
recreation
areas
such
as parks and gardens, making the
city
aesthetically pleasing, improving air quality, and helping people reduce stress.
In addition
to that, the problem with travelling
time
could be solved public transportation system. New York
City
is a great example of urban planning, in which a metro system help everybody move around the
city
and were still able to keep Central Park at the heart of the
city
. With the great benefits mentioned, real estate near parks and gardens is appealing for the majority of
city
residents. In conclusion, it seems to me that keeping
recreation
areas
in the
city
centre
is a long term benefit to
city
residents in sustainable development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commuters
  • urban areas
  • housing availability
  • alleviating housing crises
  • public transport
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental health
  • biodiversity
  • recreational
  • mental health benefits
  • urban heat islands
  • green lungs
  • community interaction
  • cohesion
  • innovative urban planning
  • multi-use buildings
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