The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first line graph compares the proportion of three household electrical devices over the period of 99 years, and the
second
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chart shows the
time
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spent on domestic work per
week
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from 1920 to 2019. It is evident that after 2000, the figure for refrigerators and vacuum cleaners rose to a peak of 100% that nearly every family owned these two devices. We can
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see a decreased trend
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the
time
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spent on
housework
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between 1920 and 2019.
According to
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the first line chart, the ownership of refrigerators was negligible in 1920, and the number of vacuum cleaners was the highest at approximately 40%.
However
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, just in 40 years, the number of washing machines overtook vacuum cleaners as the primary
households
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appliances.
By contrast
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, the figure for washing machines steadily increased from about 30% to 100% between 1920 to 2000. Looking at the
second
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graph, between 1920 and 2019, the
time
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spent on
housework
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fell from nearly 50 hours per
week
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to 10 hours per
week
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. There was a rapid decrease from 1920 to 1960 that reduced almost 30 hours per
week
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for doing
housework
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. After that, the
time
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spent on
housework
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underwent several highs and lows, and
finally
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decreased to merely 10% in 2019.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, week, housework with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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