Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as sahara desert and The Antartica. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourist who visit such places?

Nowadays many
tourists
are frequently
tour
to
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some
site
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sites
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where the situation whether bad like
Sahara
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the Sahara
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desert and
Antartica
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Antarctica
. In my ,opinion roaming around the different sites is really a passion for many
tourists
while the chance of risk factor there. The main advantage is to know a new place is really a great experiment for a
traveller
who likes to
tour
to unpredictable areas since the
experience
gives immense pleasure rather than spending time in a room.
For
example
, in
Kerala
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many
travellers
started a youtube channel that mainly explores vanlife travelling for a month or does an adventure trip to the forest on a bike because they love to find out
new
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site
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through travelling.Another point, it will give new ideas and knowledge about a new culture and lifestyle of the people were living in
these
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site
which is another level of
experience
for
travellers
.
For
example
, if someone
who
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travels to a tribe field which gives jungle life
experience
to that
traveller
.
Finallly
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Finally
, most
of
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the
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traveller
wants to stay in a quiet place which
totally
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located in a peaceful space.
For
example
, some of the
tourists
used to stay in a tent at night especially when they
tour
to
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the jungle or hike in the mountains. On the other side, some drawbacks of travelling to isolated zone, because of the risk factor hide in those areas which may not be possible to understand until something occurred.
For
example
,in 2009 in china, some
travellers
stuck
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in a cage due to a landslide that happened and that field is totally isolated and situated far from the city, so the rescue was not done fastly as can do in a familiar
site
.Another part is
tour
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to an unexplored space may cause of detrimental to
travellers
for some time from the native villagers or thieves. In conclusion, exploring and travelling to
unexplored
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the unexplored
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area
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give another level of
experience
to each
traveller
and which can't express in words. The
goverment
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government
should implement a proper system to explore travelling for
tourists
which helps them to understand the scenarios there.
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