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all over the world, the number of overweight people is growing. what do you feel are the causes of this? what are the effect?

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Introduction
obesity for the
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 decades has become one of the nationwide problems. the number of obese people even including children had risen rapidly. in
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 essay, I will explore the factors leading to
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 problems and the impact it has on individuals and society at large.
Body paragraph 1
to start with, one of the major causes of growing fat is poor dietary habits.
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, in the western world, most of the foods society eat contain a large number of fats.
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, foods like pizza, grilled chicken and fried rice.
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, one other factor that could lead to weight gain is a sedentary lifestyle. most of the population do not exercise their bodies. in
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 modern era, individuals hardly walk to their workplaces, they either go to work by car or by motorbike. both the dietary factors and sedentary lifestyle could lead to fat deposition,
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 causing fatness.
Body paragraph 2
the major effect on the individual is
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. obese patients are at risk of hypertension and diabetes.
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, in the U.S, more than half of obese persons are either hypertensives or diabetic.
Conclusion
to conclude, globally, there has been a rampant growth of obese patients and the most common cause is poor dietary habits and a sedentary lifestyle.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overweight
  • Obesity
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Nutritional education
  • Aggressive marketing
  • Screen time
  • Economic factors
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Chronic illnesses
  • Heart disease
  • Diabetes
  • Hypertension
  • Psychological issues
  • Low self-esteem
  • Healthcare systems
  • Productivity
  • Stigmatization
  • Discrimination
  • Portion sizes
  • Convenience food
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