the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical
The first line graph compares the proportion of three household electrical devices over the period of 99 years, and the
second
chart shows the time
spent on domestic work per week
from 1920 to 2019.
It is evident that after 2000, the figure for refrigerators and vacuum cleaners rose to a peak of 100% that nearly every family owned these two devices. We can also
see a decreased trend for
the Change preposition
in
time
spent on housework
between 1920 and 2019.
According to
the first line chart, the ownership of refrigerators was negligible in 1920, and the number of vacuum cleaners was the highest at approximately 40%. However
, just in 40 years, the number of washing machines overtook vacuum cleaners as the primary households
appliances. Change the noun form
household
By contrast
, the figure for washing machines steadily increased from about 30% to 100% between 1920 to 2000.
Looking at the second
graph, between 1920 and 2019, the time
spent on housework
fell from nearly 50 hours per week
to 10 hours per week
. There was a rapid decrease from 1920 to 1960 that reduced almost 30 hours per week
for doing housework
. After that, the time
spent on housework
underwent several highs and lows, and finally
decreased to merely 10% in 2019.Submitted by 1044191048 on
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