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In some countries, owning a house rather than renting one is very important for people. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In a number of countries, buying a property is more vital than renting an apartment for residents. In the following, I will express some reasons for
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 statement and the pros and cons of
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 problem.
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, a
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 or an apartment can represent
people
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's social status and reputation. In some countries, their
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 price is extraordinarily high and expensive. If
people
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 can own a
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, it means they have a higher salary than the average income, and they have a stable and professional job to pay the
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 price.
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, purchasing a
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 is a good investment decision and added value, especially in some developed countries' cities
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 as New York, London, and Tokyo. To have a place in those cities than can enjoy all the benefits of living in the town,
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 as the convenient transport system and the government public resources. Based on more
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 who would like to live in the city area in the future, the demand for the
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 is going to increase every year. Being the landlord can decide to lend it to the market and get a better return. Undoubtedly, the decision to buy a
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 is the most memorable and successful moment in life.
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, a good living standard should not only judge by whether
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 own a flat or not. In my opinion, a tenant can have more freedom because they can change the living environment easier when they feel unsatisfied and without any high cost.
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, most
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 spend a lot of money when they purchase a property and
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 need to return the loan to the bank in the following many years. In summary, I believe the measurement of whether
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 have a
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 is not good in society.
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