Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The entertainment sector poses lots of benefits to our lives.

People

can spend their free time watching movies, a game they root for or to

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their favourite singer.

However

, the salary of these well-known

people

reaches outrageous rates. I reckon that

such

wages are too extreme.

Instead

of giving eminent ones load salary the important

people

such

as doctors or scientists should reach that much of payment.

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advanced technology, celebrities can interact with other

people

more easily. Supposedly, if I were a movie star by using my social media accounts ı could get at millions of

people

and with accurate marketing strategies, would be able to increase my film's value and interest. Due to the attention, business owners would want to make a deal with me and

this

would lead me to illustrate their products to the public.

As a result

, the more I showed my or owners goods the more I would gain

money

. Yet, what eminent ones do is not an indispensable or a key aspect of our lives. They do not make

a considerable contributions

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to the masses or do not alleviate public problems.

On the other hand

, by allocating

this

load of

money

to scientists they have a chance to develop something convenient and beneficial. A

further

reason why their payments should

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is that

this

problematic situation adversely affects to young.

For instance

, due to the increased interest in becoming a social media phenomenon kids have started to alter their dreams. In the past, children were saying that they want to be a doctor, lawyer or astronaut in the future but now all they want is to become famous so that they earn lots of

money

. They have started to lose their creativity. To sum up, entertainers enable us to expend our time by watching them.

However

, making a movie or singing a song shouldn't bring excessive amounts of

money

. To me, while scientists wages are extremely low and discouraging celebrities shouldn't be rewarded by load payments.