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everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. how far do you share this viewpoint?

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It is often said that everybody in
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society should take a fixed amount of their
income
 to support charity. I disagree with
this
 idea, and I will explain the reasons in
this
 essay.
First
 of all, supporting charities and helping poor
people
 is so valuable, and definitely has a positive effect on our lives, but now we are living in a society where inflation is increasing day by day, so
community
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 is divided into two groups,
first
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 group are those who have
great
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 job with high
income
 and the
second
 group are those with low
income
.
People
 with high
income
 can supply their needs safely, and give some to the
people
 who need
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.
Low
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income
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 may not be able to help permanently due to
economical
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, and financial problems.
Secondly
, everyone can help as much as they can. It may not even be financial help, we can donate clothes or items that are no longer used and are not old. Doing
this
 every once in a while is very useful and has
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 economical pressure on anyone. It is true that there are some folk that
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have a plan for their expense, and they set aside money monthly or weekly for charity work. But these
people
 are very limited by these conditions of the country. To conclude, I believe that helping
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charities leads many to believe that humanity still exists and it is very valuable for us to make someone happy, so we should help as much as we can.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic equality
  • Wealth gap
  • Redistributing resources
  • Social responsibility
  • Mandatory donations
  • Financial strain
  • Voluntary donations
  • Morality
  • Ethics
  • Efficient use of resources
  • Sporadic contributions
  • Implementation challenges
  • Compliance
  • Fixed amount
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