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The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#education #people #countries #adults #governments #money
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In the present competitive era, a large number of
countries
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 consider the importance of young
people
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education
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 rather than illiterate grownups. On that, they spent huge amounts on the new
generation
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.
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, I strongly agree with the requirement of elder
people
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education
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also
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 having equal importance to develop the
nations
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. Below I describe both categories requirements. The younger
generation
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 is the future of all
countries
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 and in
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 technology developed , the world they have the key role to take up the
nations
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 to stand up on the world’s top list. In view of that,
Nations
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 are concentrating on allocating hefty budgets to
increase
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 their skills and achieve the literacy rate of 100% in the current
generation
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.
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, most of the
countries
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 providing subsidies on youth
education
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also
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increase
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education
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 facilities within the government institutions to improve
knowledge
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 rate.
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 to
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, so many developing
countries
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 have a very high percentile of younger
generation
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 comparatively adults. In my opinion, earlier
generation
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people
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 have very limited resources in learning and it was so costly for the poverty
people
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.
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, there is a limited interest of the governments to spend the money on
education
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 facilities which cause more illiteracy in elder community and
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 affected to
increase
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 poor
nations
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 in the world. To counter
this
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 situation, they have to learn the new skills and technology, to take up the nation to its heights.
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,
this
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 will lead to a gain in poverty and an
increase
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 in unemployment of elder
people
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.
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 to that, there will be a chance of increasing thefts, crimes on the lack of income resources,
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 will lead the nation into a crisis and un-stability in the global outlook. In conclusion,
Nations
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 need to understand the country will develop if all the
people
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 develop, it is not that one category of
people
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 will lead the nation. So their attention should be balanced all groups development simultaneously and according to that
nations
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 has to develop their policies on their spending.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • literacy programs
  • functional illiteracy
  • social mobility
  • inter-generational poverty
  • workforce development
  • economic growth
  • social cohesion
  • public health
  • civic participation
  • resource allocation
  • national development
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