Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes( for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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because some
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part of high
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would explain
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. Some
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believe that unpaid community
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service
should be a compulsory part of high
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because
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increasing
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and don'
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pay the other fees like one extra sports
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children don'
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move in sports
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improving
the sports
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advantage more than
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some money but more than
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have money but they like working a charity and helping
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improving is most important in life because it is showing
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your lifestyle but more than cities paid is not good for society improving.some
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but they pay self about any things need to
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the neighborhood
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.government would unpaid
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government should be allowing high
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point of all
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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