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Ownership of mobile phones has risen dramatically in recent years despite the potentially harmful effects they may have on health and the society. Governments should introduce measures to restrict ownership of mobile phones to those who need them for work. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some people believe that despite the potentially harmful effects on health and society,
ownership
 of mobile
phones
 has risen dramatically in recent times, and because of that the government should introduce measures to restrict
ownership
 of mobile
phones
, the following paragraphs will look at both sides of the argument and make conclusions.
Firstly
 the
ownership
 and
use
 of mobile
phones
 are very important in our everyday
lives
 , as not using them in
this
 present generation will be shorting one out of the social events in the society. Many people
use
 their mobile
phones
 to keep themselves informed of what is happening in the world and the majority
use
 it as their mobile office and stores for their jobs and businesses.
Secondly
,
ownership
 of a mobile phone is good as it can help you find help in case you are trapped in a lonely or strange place, so government restrictions will not work as the
use
 of mobile
phones
 improves our
lives
 positively
On the other hand
, the
use
 of mobile
phones
 has caused more harm than good and requires restrictions to reduce the negative effects on our
lives
 and health generally. It is believed that the constant
use
 of mobile
phones
 and the rays that emit from them causes brain damage. For people using
phones
 while driving has caused a lot of accidents in recent times because of lack of concentration.
Furthermore
, it has introduced the youths into bad behaviours from surfing and watching porn videos and becoming addicts in things that are detrimental to their
lives
 and character. In conclusion in as much as the
ownership
 of
phones
 is very important in our daily
lives
, the government should put some measures to sanction the
use
 most especially for the youths and kids as it affects them negatively most times .
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