IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 2

All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for a children's future. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#parents #opportunities #children #people #schools #skills #range #subjects #future
Firstly
 it is important that schools teach content that relates to students universe and can
ba
Correct your spelling
be
show examples
aplicable
Correct your spelling
applicable
 to everyday life. So I believe that some subjects should be universally
tought
Correct your spelling
taught
thought
sought
.
For example
 personal finance,
first
 aid, sex education, basic constitutional law, history and
english
Change the capitalization
English
show examples
.
In other words
, all types of
contents
Fix the agreement mistake
content
show examples
 that help to
bild
Correct your spelling
build
 a sense of
citenzenship
Correct your spelling
citizenship
 or give kids the necessary tools to have a balanced adult life.
Nonetheless
, the world is changing rapidly and it is
becaming
Correct your spelling
becoming
 more and more complicated to predict what type of knowledge will be valuable in 20 years,
for example
. So I believe that it is crucial to prepare children to live in a world that will demand constant
addaptation
Correct your spelling
adaptation
. That being said, in my
Correct your spelling
opinion
oppinion
Add a comma
,oppinion
show examples
 it is better to teach them skills
instead
 of
especific
Correct your spelling
specific
 subjects.
For example
 self-study, self-
dicipline
Correct your spelling
discipline
, resilience,
in other words
, soft skills in general. I believe
that is
 the best way to go considering that the kids from today will probably have several careers during their life and will need to be constantly adapting and reinventing themselves.
Submitted by dricaribeiro83 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: