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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #car
Having a
car
 is considered
as
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a luxury in my country.
However
, there are some people who believe that
car
 is like a white elephant. Let us discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of a
car
. Having a
car
 of your own makes you completely independent of any public
transport
. It saves a lot of time in waiting for the public
transport
 and being in long queues for the tickets. The other benefit of owning a
car
 is linked to the status one enjoys in
the
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society because of it.
Now-a-days
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Nowadays
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,
car
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the car
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 is considered
as
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an important achievement in one's life.
On the other
hand
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 there are advocates of not
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owning
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toowing
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owing
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owning
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 a
car
. According to some people, not using a
car
 and completely using
the
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public
transport
 is less costly and it saves a lot of money which one can spend on other luxuries of life. Not having a
car
 makes a person less affected by the increasing fuel prices. There is an increasing trend in the western countries to make use of public
transport
 or a bicycle in order to make the roads less congested and
environment
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 less polluted. If to own a
car
 or to use
the
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public
transport
 completely depends on the personal
curcimstances
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circumstances
circumstance
.
However
, if I were to give my opinion, I do not agree
to
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 the claim that there are fewer advantages of a
car
that
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than
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 its disadvantages.
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