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In some countries, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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In some countries, people are calling into question
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stimulating
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 to be more hard-working and being more successful in their life.
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 there are a number of drawbacks involved with
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 belief, the benefits accruing to people who are in their childhood are by no means negligible. On the plus side, the advantages of deriving
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 to work hard can be manifold.
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 with, it would bring about increasing the likelihood of learning in the future by allocating plenty of time to various activities.
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,
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 is highly likely to stimulate
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 to be
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 constructive and more aware
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 who might bear a proper level of well-being.
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, a child encouraged to do vigorous
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 in their childhood, are more likely to be
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well-known
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 in their adulthood.
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, it can lead to
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 a homogenous and unified society that have
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 unemployed individuals because they always do their best to find a proper occupation opportunity.
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, the downside can be ignored.
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 of all, placing a premium on working is bound to result in being more isolated and having
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 lifestyle.
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,
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 might trigger obesity and chronic diseases like depression, back pain and etc.
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, some studies have shown that forcing
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 to
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 hard
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 more likely to be
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 about other activities.
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, if students are driven to study a subject
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 not their desire about
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 a day, they will probably be angry about all fields of study generally because of compulsory studying. In
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, advising
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 to be more hardworking can be both rewarding and problematic simultaneously. While bringing about more productivity and more success in their future, it can lead to
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 overweight and
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 other tasks to do.
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