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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

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We are seeing changes in the structure and roles of families in
the
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recent years that we would not have imagined in the past century. Same-gender parenting is one of them. I feel that
such
 a non-traditional family type has negative impacts on the
child
, even though it may benefit the
parents
 themselves. Same-gender marriage, which was illegal in the olden days, is getting common recently. Human-rights activists, as well as LGBT societies, are lobbying governments around the globe to allow same-sex couples to officially tie the knot.
As a result
, most countries have now legalised the marriage of woman and woman or man and man. These couples would either adopt children or create their biological
child
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 with the help of advanced medical techniques.
This
 has made a huge impact
in
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 the family structure, which has a father and a mother to a
child
 traditionally. My friend, who is
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she, has a girlfriend.
However
, her family strongly opposed their relationship as they are conservative and could not accept it. Children of
such
 families would likely suffer psychologically when they reach a certain age. When they notice the difference between their family and that of their friends, they would start questioning their
parents
.
This
 difference would get more and more obvious, especially on certain days
such
 as
parents
 day or mothers day or fathers day.
This
 could hurt the children emotionally if they could not take it well. My friend's
parents
 eventually allowed their daughter's relationship with another woman based on a mutual agreement that they would not have any
child
. I believe her
parents
 thought of the consequences beforehand to have come to
such
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. To conclude, modernisation has allowed changes that we might not have thought of before. One
such
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same-sex marriage which, I believe, could bring happiness only to the couple themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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