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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email -describe where you lived when you were a student at the university -recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation -warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

#friend #place #course #university #advice #email #-describe #student #-recommend #accommodation #-warn #mistakes #students
Dear Stephen, I’m writing to you to suggest some solutions
about
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 your housing issues that I had experienced
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 time ago.
About
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 past days, I used to live in the centre of the city on Lord Street in a sublet house where I’d suffered a lot as their lifestyle did not match with mine.
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, there were no cooking facilities as my meal was included with my rent.
My
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 opinion, the best way for a student is to stay with other students, which could assist them to discuss
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their subject if they are from the same discipline, and their living-style is
same
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. , In a
private
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 rented house, the meal could be an issue unless you
donot
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do not
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 know cooking. I’ll
advice
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 you not to travel to
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 agent, which can cost you a lot of money,
although
 you may be unaware when you start with them.
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, university
accomodation
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accommodation
 is the best if you can
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. Thanks for your time. All the best! Ryan Smith
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