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Q Some people think that women should not be allowed to work in the police force. Do you Agree or Disagree?

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Law
 enforcement forces helped maintain
law
 and order in the country. There is a belief among a group of people that
female
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the female
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gender
 should not be employed as police officers. We are lucky to live in a world that there are rare cases
women
has
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have
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 faced
a
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apply
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gender
 discrimination. In the past,
world
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the world
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 has faced issues on
gender
 discrimination not letting
women
to
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be employed.
However
, in the modern
era
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 the
women
 are now able to get jobs and their voting rights in
law
 and order. Allow me to explain
this
further
.
Firstly
 in every society is working towards the goal of
women
 empowerment and
women
 have equal rights as
that
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of
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men. Whether it is employment in the military forces,
law
 enforcement or health department.
Thus
,
women
 have shown that they can handle much better, prevailing that they have
talents
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the talents
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 to work in the same field as men.
For example
,
women
 can help as they are more organised, responsible and nurturing as compared to men.
Secondly
, these qualities help in solving criminal cases in a faster way by noticing and analysing small details.
For example
, in countless TV
shows
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 they have shown that
women
 are able to lead in police forces, some of them are even leaders and role models to the troops. In conclusion, I disagree with the viewpoint that
women
 should not be employed as police officers. Every person is equal before legislation, irrespective of their
gender
.
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