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Some people believe that children should go to extra classes after school. Others, however, think that children should spend that time playing instead. Discuses both views and give your own opinion.

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Undoubtedly children should have a good educational background along with
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 amount of amusement by playing. According to my point
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 view, playing is essential than extra classes at
this
 infancy level for overall development.
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 see how the latter outnumber the former along with some examples.
Firstly
, a
child
's brain is at a development stage so he or she has to inculcate interpersonal skills which can only happen by playing with kids of their age.
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 proved that all the emotions are being tested while they start making friends. For eg. According to many educational institutions,
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 of brains happens with
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 activities for around 63% more than only studying at one place which clearly proves the point.
Moreover
, children tend to stay physically fit when they play a sport.
This
 automatically increases their food intake which is good for their body. All
this
 increases the immunity of a
child
 which
then
 helps him in the long run.So,
for instance
, a
child
 playing sports have a tendency to have good health and is very active than a
child
 who only sits and study. On the flipside, studying is important for making one's
career
 which helps him or her to attain a qualification. There are monitory benefits attached to a good
career
 which can be
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advantageous
. For eg.- The salaries paid to
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 educated
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 can be much higher than a physical trainer who has done
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career
 in sports. To conclude, playing is very crucial for kids as has
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multiplied
multiple
 benefits which can not only make the
child
phycically
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physically
 strong but
also
 mentally balanced as studies can only make
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. There are certainly many incidences in our lives where we need to
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 decisions with our balanced minds than using
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rigid studies minds.
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