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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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It is often argued that
people
 enjoy coping with each other and
that is
 the reason why fashion and consumerism thrive. In my opinion,
this
 is largely true though there are other potential practical explanations. Humans tend to compare their own life with the lives of
people
 surrounding them.
Consequently
, most individuals aim at looking not worse and ideally better than others.
This
 desire facilitates the growth of the fashion and consumer industries as
people
 buy those stuff in order to maintain a prosperous and beneficial appearance in the eyes of others.
For instance
, if the members of a certain social group start considering a car as an indicator of success, many individuals of that society would buy a car even if they do not really need it.
On the other hand
, there are other reasons facilitating the consumerism culture. The overall wealth of the human population is growing, so the number of
people
 who could afford to purchase new clothes and new goods is growing as well. Those
people
, who have just escaped poverty, buy new things not because they want to copy anyone, but because those new things help
people
 to meet their basic needs.
For instance
, high-quality hiking clothes make travelling by foot much more convenient and safe.
Consequently
, as soon as
people
 could afford
such
 clothes they buy them. To conclude,
although
 there are individuals who purchase new goods and fashion items just for the sake of maintaining a good public appearance, others buy them out of necessity. .
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