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People are increasingly getting married later in life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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people
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 tend to get married at an older
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. Even though getting married later in
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 might lead
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 to work on their self-improvement and try to get to know themselves better, it can create some difficulties to make adjustments between couples. In my opinion, the advantages of getting married later in
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outweighs
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 its disadvantages. The main advantage of getting married while not
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 young
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, is that it gives
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 the chance to work on their quality of personal
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 and get to know themselves better
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 so that they can find out what they want from their
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 what to expect from their partners.
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, it means
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 become independent and have a crystal-clear view of their needs and goals.
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, one of my friends got married when she was at the
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 of 31, which is considered as an old
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 for marriage in Iran, while she had her own business and was aware of her priorities. It has been 5 years since she has got married and she is satisfied with her
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. All in all, getting married depends on being mature enough which happens more in older
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. That said, the main disadvantage of ending to
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 in older ages is leading
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 to find it difficult to make agreements and adjustments to other’s likings and needs which can appear in different situations
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 as financial materials and rules in
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. When a person lives a long time with her or his own rules, it will become hard for them to change themselves and lose their freedom. All things considered, the tendency to get married at
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 is increasing and though it gives the individuals the chance to work on their quality of
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 to know themselves better, it can cause some difficulties in making adjustments. All in all, I believe that the advantages of getting married later in
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 its disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal freedom
  • financial independence
  • personal growth
  • societal perceptions
  • emotional support
  • social connectivity
  • mental health
  • long-term security
  • compromise
  • flexibility
  • self-esteem
  • isolation
  • stigma
  • hobbies and interests
  • time and energy
  • build a broader network
  • pursuing further education
  • allocate their money
  • career-related decisions
  • liberty
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