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People are increasingly getting married later in life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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In
this
 day and
age
,
people
 tend to get married at an older
age
. Even though getting married later in
life
 might lead
people
 to work on their self-improvement and try to get to know themselves better, it can create some difficulties to make adjustments between couples. In my opinion, the advantages of getting married later in
life
outweighs
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 its disadvantages. The main advantage of getting married while not
in
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 young
age
, is that it gives
people
 the chance to work on their quality of personal
life
 and get to know themselves better
,
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 so that they can find out what they want from their
life
 and
also
 what to expect from their partners.
As a result
, it means
people
 become independent and have a crystal-clear view of their needs and goals.
For instance
, one of my friends got married when she was at the
age
 of 31, which is considered as an old
age
 for marriage in Iran, while she had her own business and was aware of her priorities. It has been 5 years since she has got married and she is satisfied with her
life
. All in all, getting married depends on being mature enough which happens more in older
age
. That said, the main disadvantage of ending to
be
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 single in
life
 in older ages is leading
people
 to find it difficult to make agreements and adjustments to other’s likings and needs which can appear in different situations
such
 as financial materials and rules in
house
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. When a person lives a long time with her or his own rules, it will become hard for them to change themselves and lose their freedom. All things considered, the tendency to get married at
older
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age
 in
life
 is increasing and though it gives the individuals the chance to work on their quality of
life
 and
getting
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 to know themselves better, it can cause some difficulties in making adjustments. All in all, I believe that the advantages of getting married later in
life
outpaces
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 its disadvantages.
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