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People are increasingly getting married later in life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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age
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,
people
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 tend to get married at an older
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. Even though getting married later in
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 might lead
people
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 to work on their self-improvement and try to reach a better self-awareness, it can create some difficulties
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 adjustments between couples. In my opinion, the advantages of getting married later in
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 outweigh its disadvantages. The main advantage of getting married
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 is that it gives
people
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 the chance to work on their quality of personal
life
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 and get to know themselves better so that they can have a vivid picture of what they want in
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 and
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 what to expect from their partners.
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, it means
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 become independent and have a crystal-clear view of their needs and goals.
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, one of my friends got married when she was 31 years of
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, which can be considered
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an
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old
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 for marriage in Iran,
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 she had her own business and had a solid understanding of her priorities.
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, she got married 5 years ago, and she is satisfied with her
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. All in all, getting married depends on being mature enough and as it is said “
age
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 brings wisdom.” That said, the main disadvantage of staying single until later in
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 is that
people
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 are likely to find it difficult to cope with each other and make adjustments to each other’s interests and needs which can be manifested in various ways.
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, financial matters and the restrictions which are brought about by married
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 could adversely impact the marriages.
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, bitter disagreements could arise out of the conflict of interests, especially, if both spouses are alphas. When
people
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 have experienced an independent
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life style
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 for years, they might find it difficult to adjust to what is expected of them. In a
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 it will be hard for them to make certain sacrifices.
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, the man may not be willing to abandon the Sunday night football game to have dinner with his in-laws which will most definitely be offensive to his wife, arguments will follow and the rest is history. All things considered, the tendency to get married at an older
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 in
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 is increasing and though it gives
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individuals the chance to work on their quality of
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 to know themselves better, it can cause some difficulties in making adjustments. All in all, I believe that the advantages of getting married later in
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 outpaces its disadvantages.

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Expand your conclusion to reinforce your opinion more explicitly.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure consistency in the use of transitional phrases to improve flow between paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Clarify some points in the second body paragraph regarding the types of adjustments needed.
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Well-structured introduction and conclusion that effectively present your opinion.
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Strong use of specific examples, particularly in the first body paragraph, to support your arguments.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal freedom
  • financial independence
  • personal growth
  • societal perceptions
  • emotional support
  • social connectivity
  • mental health
  • long-term security
  • compromise
  • flexibility
  • self-esteem
  • isolation
  • stigma
  • hobbies and interests
  • time and energy
  • build a broader network
  • pursuing further education
  • allocate their money
  • career-related decisions
  • liberty
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