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Nowadays children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time being active or creative. What is the reason for this? What measures should be taken to encourage children to be more active?

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In today's fast-moving world where children spend much time on television rather than they did in the past and spend less amount of time being active or creative. There are many reasons behind
this
 like there is influence by the
characters
 played by actors and
also
 advertisements and cartoon
characters
 too, and there are plenty of solutions which will become handy which will discuss below.
To begin
 with, the utmost important thing is the reason why teenagers attract most to
tv
 is that their role models play different
characters
 with whom they influenced to see the movie or series. Like, the famous movie the fast and furious franchise in which vin diesel tell us how important family is and they are attracted by that. Even, advertisements
also
 play vital roles to clinch the attention by showing advertising which makes more effect in juvenile's mind. Even cartoon
characters
 make us watch them again and again. There are numerous ways by which we can do to make our children stop watching
tv
 and start them to be productive.
First
 and foremost, is let them teach the value of time, and show the right path, rather than sitting and watching
tv
 they can do good things for them and for their family.
Secondly
, let them teach by their ideals, from they were started and what they did to be where they are today. Rather than scolding or punishing use simple and polite language to let them understand what is life worth . To sum up, maybe there are drawbacks of watching
tv
 rather than being active or creatives but we can teach them lessons by showing the right path with help of the
characters
 they are influenced by or know the worth of life.
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