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Many people believe that social networking sites like Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.to what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, both work and study can easily take a person out of their
home
 country.
This
 can be good because
people
 can explore new cultures now more than ever. At the same time, world
travelers
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 may become disconnected from their own
home
 countries. In
this
 essay, I will take a closer look at the aforementioned key advantage and key
disadvantage
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. To be sure, ordinary
people
 now have unprecedented access to life abroad. It is easier than ever to work or study in a foreign land for months and even years. Many large international corporations offer overseas work to their employees, just as nearly all universities provide study abroad options at partner campuses overseas. Ultimately, nearly any adult anywhere in the world can potentially immerse themselves in another language or culture, with support from their bosses or teachers. The problem is that international workers and students sometimes become unconcerned with the affairs in the nations they are from.
This
 kind of apathy can prevent
people
 from doing their civic duty. As one example,
people
 from countries with compulsory military service may spend years abroad and even renounce their citizenship to avoid protecting their homeland. Even more commonly,
people
 who go abroad may choose not to vote in elections back
home
, failing to make their voice heard on important matters. So modern mobility can undermine one’s ability or desire to make a difference back
home
. Learning about other cultures by actually living abroad is a powerful tool for better intercultural understanding.
However
, as valuable as
this
 is, sometimes going abroad can cause
people
 to ignore the importance of their own culture and country. Not all students and workers should go abroad, and the ones that do should not forget their role in their country of origin.
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  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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