Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others.

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Nowadays, more and more

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choose to watch TV set at home as their leisure activity. Some

people

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think that it can make

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lazy and isolated from socializing with others. I totally agree with

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view. There is no dought that

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can give us an opportunity to get knowledge.

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way, we can see different landscapes and other countries' cultures without going there.

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, if

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dominates the free

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, the pros will outweigh

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the crops, and there are several problems it could cause.

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, watching

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television

for a long

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is harmful to

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community's

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health. It can damage our eyesight and become fat. There is a phase called 'sofa potato which illustrates those

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who stay on the sofa and watch

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all day. The tevelesion' slight will make

people

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's eyes feel tired even destroy our eyesight. What's more, staying at home to watch

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instead

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of doing exercises make

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fat and lazy.

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, it is not good for

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to improve social skills and communication skills. Because face to a

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Television

all day will make

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feel lonely and isolated. And

people

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who watch

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all day can not get the form of hanging out with friends. It can be harmful to one person's mental health. In conclusion,

people

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should limit the

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of watching

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and do some outdoor activities

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as having a picnic, riding a bicycle or going hiking with their friends or families in their free

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which can get more joy and happiness.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

255 words

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Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others.

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Write a letter to a city planning manager about demolition of a historical building in your area and say – Explain why it shouldn’t be demolished. – Suggest a future use for this building. – Recommend a way to raise money for repairs.

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Around the world, rural people are moving to cities and urban areas, so populations in the countryside are decreasing. Do you think that this is a positive or negative development?