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In the past, knowledge was contained in books. Nowadays, knowledge is uploaded to the internet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#books #internet #outweigh
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In the past
books
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 were considered the best source of
knowledge
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. But nowadays in the technology era, people tend to use the
Internet
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 to research
knowledge
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. It has negative and positive effects. In my opinion, we have many more advantages than disadvantages One of the major advantages of the
internet
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 is that we can find
knowledge
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 cheaper and save time.
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, in education, many students can find study materials about specific topics to study different from
books
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. If we had projects, maybe we would go to the library all day to find the main source. On the
internet
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, we have abundant websites to access
no limit
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knowledge
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 for relevant
information
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.
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, we can find how to cook cupcakes on the
Internet
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 and they have a variety of
information
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. But there are several disadvantages, on the
internet
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 has much
information
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. Maybe we do not know what is the best
information
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.
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, some terrorists can be hidden hackers to damage
information
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 at risk lost personal
information
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 compared to
books
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 that have been written by an author or expert and it brings more reliable
information
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 than on the
internet
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.
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we used
books
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 which consumed a lot of money.
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, most people likely seeking
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 on the
Internet
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also
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 obtain
knowledge
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 because it is available and cheaper or even free
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 in my view, in the digital era most people prefer looking for
information
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 quickly on the
internet
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 than
books
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.
As a result
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, we have more benefits than drawbacks.
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coherence cohesion
The introduction lacks a clear statement of the writer's position and the conclusion does not effectively summarize the main points.
task achievement
The essay partially addresses the prompt, but the position is not clearly stated. There are relevant points, but they are not fully developed with specific examples.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning
  • Virtual libraries
  • Cyberspace
  • Search engine literacy
  • Critical evaluation skills
  • Open-source information
  • Data mining
  • Intellectual property
  • Digital preservation
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