Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, many
people
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time
for
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because they spend more
time
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working. From my perspective,
this
situation
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more drawbacks than benefits. In
this
essay, both of these viewpoints will be discussed before reaching a conclusion. On the one hand, working longer hours creates several problems. Generally,
people
should have
time
to do their
leisure
activities
in order to reduce stress.
Although
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to
work
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is a good
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, employees should think of
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.
Firstly
, working too long will lead to many health problems
such
as office syndrome, obesity, stress, etc.
Secondly
, lack of
leisure
activities
will decrease their ability to adapt themselves to societies. Social skills can build from
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lots of
activities
.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that many
people
earn more money from working hard and long hours. They can become millionaires if they put
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effort more than rivals.
For instance
, Flash, a leading logistic company in Thailand, has longer service hours than other providers. As they believe that the only way to win
this
game, the CEO mentioned that his team needed to work longer at the
first
stage. Another benefit is that some
leisure
activities
require a lot of money.
Therefore
, not doing
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hobby
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will save some money. In conclusion, it is true that
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will not happy without
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. On top of that,it is better for
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an employee
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to reduce their stress level by balancing both working
time
and
leisure
activities
. I personally believe that
people
should keep their
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time
to do
leisure
activities
.
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