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Some people argue that the government should spend money on public services and facilities, but not on the arts. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #money #services #facilities #arts
Dear Mrs Barrett, My name is Mikhail Orlov and I have seen your advertisement in our local newspaper that you need assistance with your house. Luckily my home locates very close to your exactly on the
next
 street. So, I will be very glad to help you. As I know you have a beautiful garden and a large house as well as all in our area. I could provide
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help with your yard, I need to admit, that you have really wonderful elm trees and
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 with roses in front of your building.
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, I know how it hard is to do a chore in
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 a big house, so I
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 can help you with that. I am really keen on gardening and my yard is one of the best in our district and
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 you with yours will be a pleasure.
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, as you may already know I have been participating in our garden club since 2012, more than 11 years. About the chore, I find it a very relaxing activity, because I can turn on my MP3 player and do it. I often help with it to my grandmother. I need to give you a brief overview of my schedule. So, I am available every day from 7pm till 10pm, I need to explain that I have my work from Monday to Friday (9am to 6p,) and my university courses every weekend from 10am to 18pm.
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, I need to inform you that I am going to Greece with my family in the middle of June, at other times I am fully yours. With faithful, Mikhail Orlov
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