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There is a general increase in anti-social behavior and lack of respect for others. What are the causes and solutions?

#behavior #lack #respect
Nowadays, disrespect and other kinds of anti-social behaviours become more trending than before. While there are some reasons for
this
 issue, it can be addressed by some solutions. The
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 which are against social rules are happened because of unstable upbringing and globalization.
Firstly
, these days parents experience
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 lifestyle, and
this
 leads them to more work hours.
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 remains
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 less quality time for nurturing and being with their children, so children in
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families
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 usually learn less social skills.
Secondly
, the communication between countries grows
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.
Although
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 has a lot of
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 for them,
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 a culture or
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 which is common in a country
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 may consider as
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anti-social in another one.
For instance
, dancing or singing by women is a normal act in most countries, but in some
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 countries,
such
 as Iran it is against social behaving
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 and even a crime. There are some actions which can be done to tackle the above.
First
, children should be educated. Families should spend more time together, and
this
 helps parents recognize bad
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 early age.
Then
 they can
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 the
second
 step, the governments should revise the laws and culture, and change the ones obsoleted for
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 world.
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actions that are not really offensive to
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 of society. In conclusion,
although
 the growing trend can be seen in bad social
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,
this
 issue can be easily addressed by some actions
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