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Some people think that government should provide free education at every level however some say that individuals should have to pay for their University education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #education #level #say #individuals #university
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This
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government
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 provide free
education
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 at every level and
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 some people criticized
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 fact .
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focus
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 on two different types of
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 of
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 aspect . I preferred that
government
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 should have to make planning the way they have to improve the
education
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 structure in our country so that n Every individual
have
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 equal right
of
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education
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 and job facilities to every individual like foreign countries Canada and others . In
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burden
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 of parents reduces on
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shoulder
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 of their children and every individual has
chance
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a chance
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 to get
education
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 rights to reduce unemployment, poverty, democracy,
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,politics.
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 one side ,
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 is the prime responsibility of
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 to take charge to provide a free cost of
education
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 to each and every level of individual of
society
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 without partiality for secondary level
education
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 .So that every individual will become more educated and they will get their jobs accomplished with their
education
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 On the other side ,
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government
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the government
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 should have to take initiative to provide
part time
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 jobs for those individuals who
has
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 a chance to take admission to university so that they can pay their fees
by
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 their
owns
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 and it should automatically reduce the burden of parents and
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 take a good step for the improvement of
society
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 ,
welfare
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the welfare
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 of
society
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. in
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every one
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 to give equal chance for
education
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 In conclusion ,
government
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sould
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should
would
 have to take
hard
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a hard
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 step for improvement of
country
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the country
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 for improvement of
society
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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