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Some people think that government should provide free education at every level however some say that individuals should have to pay for their University education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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This
 paragraph shows that some people think that
government
 provide free
education
 at every level and
on the other hand
 some people criticized
this
 fact .
This
 paragraph mainly
focus
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 on two different types of
varients
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variants
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 of
this
 aspect . I preferred that
government
 should have to make planning the way they have to improve the
education
 structure in our country so that n Every individual
have
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 equal right
of
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education
 and job facilities to every individual like foreign countries Canada and others . In
this
 way
burden
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 of parents reduces on
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the shoulder
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shoulder
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 of their children and every individual has
chance
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a chance
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 to get
education
 rights to reduce unemployment, poverty, democracy,
theifts
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thefts
,politics.
In
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 one side ,
this
 is the prime responsibility of
government
 to take charge to provide a free cost of
education
 to each and every level of individual of
society
 without partiality for secondary level
education
 .So that every individual will become more educated and they will get their jobs accomplished with their
education
 On the other side ,
government
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the government
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 should have to take initiative to provide
part time
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 jobs for those individuals who
has
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 a chance to take admission to university so that they can pay their fees
by
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on
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 their
owns
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 and it should automatically reduce the burden of parents and
also
 take a good step for the improvement of
society
 ,
welfare
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the welfare
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 of
society
. in
this
 way
every one
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 to give equal chance for
education
 In conclusion ,
government
sould
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should
would
 have to take
hard
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a hard
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 step for improvement of
country
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the country
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 for improvement of
society
 .
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