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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. to what extend do you agree or disagree with the statemen

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Given the alien surrounding , many people may face difficulty in expressing their intention and emotions to others in a foreign
language
. Voice tone and slang may differ for each nationality , causing an opportunity for misunderstanding.
For instance
 , Korean tend to speak slowly ,while British
speak
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 faster . When Korean visits Britain they feel like being treated rudely , even though
that is
 not the case.
Similarly
 , oral communication in an unfamiliar
language
 can create cultural barriers. Various accents lead to biased opinions among native speakers as a disgrace to their
language
 .
As a result
 , it can lead to serious backlashes
such
 as the one that occurred in Germany during the world war . The most practical issues tend to originate from day-to-day activities . Multiple signs and indicators are marked in the road for the comfort of travellers. Lack of clarity on the above details which are in the local
language
 can cause inconvenience to the general public. A study suggests that immigrants from foreign regions are the reason for the surge in traffic congestion in metropolitans , due to less awareness of details.
Likewise
 , unemployment is
also
 a general issue faced because of a new
language
 . Despite many skilled workers travelling abroad , they are marginalized because of their improper linguistic skills. Based on the above issues , I believe that
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speaking a new
language
 in a different destination might have
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 chance of causing adverse repercussions. In Conclusion , communicating in a different
language
 may cause detrimental
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 ranging from socio-demographic life to routine work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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