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Some people believe that everyone has the right to university education. Therefore, the government should make university education free for everyone, no matter what their financial background is. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Tuition fees for all
university
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students
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 with any financial status are thought by some people must be paid by
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, because they think
everyone
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 has a right to higher
education
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.
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 I think
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 is a good
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 to provide free
university
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education
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 for some
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, I disagree with the
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 that making 
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education
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 free for all is one of
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governments'
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 services. On the one hand, I believe free tertiary
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 for those who have a good educational background can be beneficial for society. These
students
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 proved their respect for the budget which the government spent for them in schools, so the risk of leaving
university
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 in the middle of studying and destroying government money is low.
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, in
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 way
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 give a chance to studious people who can be more productive and beneficial for society than inactive ones. But
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 does not ignore the right of
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 for
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 which with effort can be achieved.
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,owing to some major barriers it is impossible for
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 in many
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 to afford free higher
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 for
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. Except in some privileged
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, in most
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 due to the limitation of overall budget and expenses of
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education
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,  higher
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 budgets are far lower than the amount they need to fulfil
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 authorities have to select a limited number of
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 for free
university
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education
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 based on their educational background.  AIn conclusion, some people believe that
governments
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 should allow
everyone
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 to go to
university
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 for free, but except
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 developed
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, it is impossible for other
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 to execute
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 valuable
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