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Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem

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In recent years, several governments have been confronting the issues of controlling and modifying the offenders after they committed a crime. The newest report has confirmed that the weakness of judgment systems and punishment and economic conditions have led to more delinquent drives to conduct crimes. From my point of view, providing the classes based on correcting the behaviour of the offenders who committed a crime and supplying the job for them by considering their experts would be effective in overcoming
this
 problem. I will explain the statement in my upcoming paragraphs with complete details. To start with, one of the main reasons that caused many culprits to do an illegal act after being released from confinement is an economic problem that they have dealt with.
For instance
, in the past ten years, the government in Iran, due to the sanction has applied by western countries causing substantial inflation, and the government has not succeeded in providing them with an appropriate profession for people, including the far more comprehensive range of communities and offenders. So, by these problems flow in Iran, many culprits have driven to commit a crime again because of living costs they have to earn money.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation programs
  • social stigma
  • ex-convicts
  • reintegration
  • support systems
  • mental health issues
  • addiction problems
  • criminal networks
  • incarceration
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