Smacking childern is the best form of discipline To what extent do you agree or disagree

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that slapping is a good method to
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discipline
children.
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,smacking is necessary
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some
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of growth stone ,
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strongly disagree
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this
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, no need to punish a child for every
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he committed. Some mistakes can be guided by proper education and
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.
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, children with low
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could be treated by
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proper training rather than smacking them.
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a child
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child
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with low self can be easily affected by
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of elders.
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behavior
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can be lead to
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disorder or
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discipline
  • smacking
  • punishment
  • behavior
  • childhood
  • communication
  • rebellion
  • consequences
  • alternatives
  • psychological impact
  • constructive
  • authoritarian
  • neglectful
  • abusive
  • controversial
  • divisive
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