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Writing Samples
Band 5

Should people be allowed to travel in to space? Give reasons and examples to support your opinion. Write an essay of three or four paragraphs. Use some of the expressions below as you write.

It is
common
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a common
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 belief that
traveling
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travelling
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 in
space
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are
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is
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 not be allowed for everyone.
However
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, I firmly believe that
people
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 can easily get to the
space
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 in the future. And
this
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 essay will address the reasons for my views as follow.
To begin
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 with,
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
plenty of
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people
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 know that our
Earth
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are
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is
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 nearly in crisis due to the destruction of lots of companies, factories…Due to the population of the whole world, we are no longer enough
space
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 to live
in
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on
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such
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Earth
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 anymore. In recent years, there are many deforestation, tsunami or global warming, which is
the
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a
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 serious problem for us to
move
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 to
other planet
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another planet
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. Some scientists say that we can’t not only live
in
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on
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 our
Earth
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 anymore in 200 years! Nowadays, there are
many
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much
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company
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companies
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try
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trying
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 to make
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a rocket
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rocket
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rockets
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 to
move
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people
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 to
the
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apply
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other planet.
For instance
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, Elon Musk, who is known as the richest man in the world has invented SpaceX. The company that makes us can go to the
space
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 easily. There
are
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is
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 nothing
can
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that can
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 prevent us from going to
the
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apply
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space
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.
First
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, we will
takes
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take
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 water and food
first
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,
then
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 we can easily
move
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 to
other planet
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another planet
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. In many films, we
also
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 see there are lots of
people
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can
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who can
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 easily
move
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in
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into
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Space
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. In conclusion, due to the
polluted
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pollution
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 and crisis of our
Earth
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 and
people
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also
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are
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being
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 ready for going straight to
the
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apply
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Space
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, there are no reasons for not
traveling
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travelling
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 in
Space
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. It is clear that in the future we can easily
move
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in
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into
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Space
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.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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