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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the chart compared the
sales
 of
two
 agricultural products in five western countries between 1999 and 2004.
Overall
, the sale of
coffee
 beans in the United Kingdom grew the most, but Sweden had the lowest.
In addition
,
bananas
 had been popular in Switzerland,
while
 the sale in Denmark reduced.
According to
 the chart,
two
 countries had decreasing situations in
bananas
.
Conversely
, all of the
coffee
sales
 in the given European countries climbed, and the highest one even reach thirteen times.
On the other hand
, the selling of the provided products in British and Switzerland not only showed a positive increase but
also
 had been remained
at
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 the top
two
.
Furthermore
,
the
Correct article usage
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coffee
sales
 in Denmark and Sweden
had
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displayed the same growing proportion. As for
bananas
, the sale data in these five places
had
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fluctuated up and down, but no similar information. In summary, the
overall
sales
 increase in
bananas
 was more than in
coffee
,
although
two
 areas had
reducing
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 data.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, two, coffee, bananas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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