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Divorce rates and family breakdowns are increasing globally, it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

Lack of communication and closeness between family members is a vitally important issue in many societies today. In
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 discuss the causes of
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 offer some possible solutions to it. In my view, the primary cause of
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 is the modern lifestyle. Most
parents
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 today work much harder than ever before. In the past, one parent – usually the mother – stayed at home to take care of the children. In recent times,
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, it has become increasingly common for both
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 to work.
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, more and more children now grow up with neither parent at home. It is unsurprising,
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, that families are no longer as close as they once were. One other factor adding to
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 is that people today spend too much time on solitary activities like watching television. In order to overcome
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 and make families closer,
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lifestyle
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must change. I feel more
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 should stay at home and take care
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 children. Perhaps governments could subsidise
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 who choose to look after their families rather than
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. Of course, these
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 would probably not fully cover the income a family would reduce the financial pain of surviving on one income and afford to do so. Another positive step would be to promote active pastimes through public education programmes.
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 it is improbable that any solution will be found in the near future, I feel that the
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 measures would be a good first step.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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