Divorce rates and family breakdowns are increasing globally, it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it. Write at least 250 words.

Lack of communication and closeness between family members is a vitally important issue in many societies today. In
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essay, I will
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discuss the causes of
this
problem
and
then
offer some possible solutions to it. In my view, the primary cause of
this
problem
is the modern lifestyle. Most
parents
today work much harder than ever before. In the past, one parent – usually the mother – stayed at home to take care of the children. In recent times,
however
, it has become increasingly common for both
parents
to work.
As a result
, more and more children now grow up with neither parent at home. It is unsurprising,
then
, that families are no longer as close as they once were. One other factor adding to
this
problem
is that people today spend too much time on solitary activities like watching television. In order to overcome
this
problem
and make families closer,
peoples’
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lifestyle
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must change. I feel more
parents
should stay at home and take care
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children. Perhaps governments could subsidise
parents
who choose to look after their families rather than
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. Of course, these
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would probably not fully cover the income a family would reduce the financial pain of surviving on one income and afford to do so. Another positive step would be to promote active pastimes through public education programmes.
To conclude
,
while
it is improbable that any solution will be found in the near future, I feel that the
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measures would be a good first step.
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