It is believed that women are more suited to child-rearing than men. What is your opinion on this issue?

The Presented chart depicts the United Kingdom (UK) telephone calls, in the total number of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • child-rearing
  • caregiver
  • social constructs
  • nurturing
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • paternity leave
  • co-parenting
  • development
  • economic pressures
  • primary caregiver
  • gender biases
  • fluidity of roles
  • societal norms
  • inherent differences
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