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Some students tend to travel after finishing school and spend time working somewhere instead of going to the university directly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Few students like to travel after finishing their schooling and show interest to do
part time
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 jobs or internships to gain experience,
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 going to universities directly. It totally depends upon the interest and repercussions of a person lifestyle, the essay future
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about
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the merits and demerits.
Education
 is important but knowledge doesn’t come only from
education
.
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 advantages are one can learn from their experiences , they can explore more compared to people who are bookworms considering ancient people without
minimum
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 of schooling, they invented many things.
For example
, Thomas Edison got a late start in his schooling following an illness and
as a result
 his mind often wandered, prompting one of his teachers to call him addled. He dropped his schooling but invented a Bulb. Significantly,
a severe disadvantages
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 of not going to university directly may lead to long term
education
 and there are pitfall consequences of lack of chance to getting certification on
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 course.
For example
, there is a
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businessman
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business man
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businessman
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 known as
kantii
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Kanti
dutt
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 who drop out
from
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his higher
education
, even though he succeeded in business with
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 amount of profits, he is not having certification of MBA. I conclude that there are both merits as well as demerits, either going to university directly after schooling or working in someplace to gain required knowledge totally depends on their desire and interests. I suggest
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 college and practical knowledge to attain all ways of profits.
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